This is a short story, at best a novella, stretched into the length of 3 or 4 large novels.
Another improvement: cut the repetitions. The story repeats itself at least twice if not three times, and while it might fit the theme of fractals, it makes the story feel even longer and more pointless than it is.
And that brings to mind another improvement: time-skip the travelling and cryo scenes. Why can't we just cut to when they arrive at their destination? All the sitting around, idly chatting, twiddling thumbs, etc. is just boring, and doesn't serve the story in any way.
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This is a short story, at best a novella, stretched into the length of 3 or 4 large novels.
Another improvement: cut the repetitions. The story repeats itself at least twice if not three times, and while it might fit the theme of fractals, it makes the story feel even longer and more pointless than it is.
And that brings to mind another improvement: time-skip the travelling and cryo scenes. Why can't we just cut to when they arrive at their destination? All the sitting around, idly chatting, twiddling thumbs, etc. is just boring, and doesn't serve the story in any way.