And I'm going to list off the ways it could have. First, when Eragon arrives in elfland, he is disturbed by how different everything is. It comes off as the uncanny valley to him, and he doesn't like it one bit. That would add some tension to the scene, since we now have conflict.
Then when Arya meets with her mother, we could have Arya snap and call out her Mother for doing nothing while she was imprisoned. Arya is majorly pissed off for the elves for abandoning things and only gets angrier because of the apparent lack of reaction. She would not forgive the Queen immediately and we were set up a plotline for later.
A later conversation would have Arya reveal that her time among humans has made her become very different from the other elves. She also reveals that since the elves retreated into the forests they've become stagnant. Arya would then reveal that she was slated to become a Dragon Rider, and really wanted to try touching one of the eggs. But Galbatorix ruined everything with his war.
Finally, Eragon would be shown to his new quarters. Rather than accepting them without reaction, Eragon would feel almost scandalized at his royal treatment. He would feel like he has not done anything to earn all this. This would make him more likeable.
I would also have Eragon put his foot in his mouth during the feat by asking about meat. When one of the other elves is scornful {probably Vanir.} Arya would ask why killing an animal is any different from killing a plant. Arya believes that nature is not a harmony, but an endless struggle. And therefore that the elves attempts to create a sort of harmony are the unnatural element.
This reveals that Arya overall rejects the common elven viewpoint. It would also set up Eragon's rivalry with Vanir ahead of time.
Bam. Done. This chapter serves a purpose, sets up several subplots which might make this plotline interesting, and establishes Eragon's main antagonist.
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And I'm going to list off the ways it could have. First, when Eragon arrives in elfland, he is disturbed by how different everything is. It comes off as the uncanny valley to him, and he doesn't like it one bit. That would add some tension to the scene, since we now have conflict.
Then when Arya meets with her mother, we could have Arya snap and call out her Mother for doing nothing while she was imprisoned. Arya is majorly pissed off for the elves for abandoning things and only gets angrier because of the apparent lack of reaction. She would not forgive the Queen immediately and we were set up a plotline for later.
A later conversation would have Arya reveal that her time among humans has made her become very different from the other elves. She also reveals that since the elves retreated into the forests they've become stagnant. Arya would then reveal that she was slated to become a Dragon Rider, and really wanted to try touching one of the eggs. But Galbatorix ruined everything with his war.
Finally, Eragon would be shown to his new quarters. Rather than accepting them without reaction, Eragon would feel almost scandalized at his royal treatment. He would feel like he has not done anything to earn all this. This would make him more likeable.
I would also have Eragon put his foot in his mouth during the feat by asking about meat. When one of the other elves is scornful {probably Vanir.} Arya would ask why killing an animal is any different from killing a plant. Arya believes that nature is not a harmony, but an endless struggle. And therefore that the elves attempts to create a sort of harmony are the unnatural element.
This reveals that Arya overall rejects the common elven viewpoint. It would also set up Eragon's rivalry with Vanir ahead of time.
Bam. Done. This chapter serves a purpose, sets up several subplots which might make this plotline interesting, and establishes Eragon's main antagonist.
Anyway, this is just me brainstorming.