This is simply brilliant. It's quite short and simple, but it's so effective.
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I was hesitant about posting this, because I wrote it in one and didn't go back to edit or wait on it for a few days. I didn't think it'd be good enough but Calliope wouldn't let go of my mind until I no longer had it in me.
So thank you so much for saying so.
An interesting way to refer to the voices he hears.
It comes from my own experiences. I used to hallucinate the presence of someone who hurt me in places I definitely knew they weren't, so I was holding both the certainty that what I was seeing was false and the fact that most of me was reacting as if my brain wasn't lying to me.
The best way I found to describe it was that I was seeing things I "definitely knew weren't there".
And I feel sorry for Jarnunvösk, even though I barely know her.
Yeah. She's a woman fridged to motivate the villain. I tried to characterize her a little bit by comparing her to Shruikan, but I know I didn't do much.
And this is Galbatorix's inciting incident. It has to be clear that he loves Jarnunvösk and he believes she should have survived. It has to be both or he wouldn't have "gone mad with grief".
And I also see you implied Oromis was Galbatorix's teacher, which is quite heavily implied in canon.
I wanted to state that Oromis was Galbatorix's teacher, but that's not explicitly said in canon. I felt that whether Oromis was Galbatorix's teacher or not, it would be reasonable to think they might have met at least once.
This is really touching.
I knew that I needed Galbatorix to do something to show how much he cares for Jarnunvösk. Hold her and cry? Well, yes, he's doing that but I needed something more definite to signify the closing of a life. So I decided to have him rebel against elven teachings and grant Jarnunvösk and their companions a burial in the traditions of his people.
The details of the ritual come from examining Galbatorix's probable circumstances - exhausted, possibly injured, overwrought with grief - and comparing that to things he could do considering that three of the people who need burial are dragons.
So, blood is often considered to be symbolic of life. The blood is his, so he's the one taking on the debt. The rune just indicates that someone else will pay for their passage.
...And he's postponing. And I still know he's doomed.
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I was hesitant about posting this, because I wrote it in one and didn't go back to edit or wait on it for a few days. I didn't think it'd be good enough but Calliope wouldn't let go of my mind until I no longer had it in me.
So thank you so much for saying so.
An interesting way to refer to the voices he hears.
It comes from my own experiences. I used to hallucinate the presence of someone who hurt me in places I definitely knew they weren't, so I was holding both the certainty that what I was seeing was false and the fact that most of me was reacting as if my brain wasn't lying to me.
The best way I found to describe it was that I was seeing things I "definitely knew weren't there".
And I feel sorry for Jarnunvösk, even though I barely know her.
Yeah. She's a woman fridged to motivate the villain. I tried to characterize her a little bit by comparing her to Shruikan, but I know I didn't do much.
And this is Galbatorix's inciting incident. It has to be clear that he loves Jarnunvösk and he believes she should have survived. It has to be both or he wouldn't have "gone mad with grief".
And I also see you implied Oromis was Galbatorix's teacher, which is quite heavily implied in canon.
I wanted to state that Oromis was Galbatorix's teacher, but that's not explicitly said in canon. I felt that whether Oromis was Galbatorix's teacher or not, it would be reasonable to think they might have met at least once.
This is really touching.
I knew that I needed Galbatorix to do something to show how much he cares for Jarnunvösk. Hold her and cry? Well, yes, he's doing that but I needed something more definite to signify the closing of a life. So I decided to have him rebel against elven teachings and grant Jarnunvösk and their companions a burial in the traditions of his people.
The details of the ritual come from examining Galbatorix's probable circumstances - exhausted, possibly injured, overwrought with grief - and comparing that to things he could do considering that three of the people who need burial are dragons.
So, blood is often considered to be symbolic of life. The blood is his, so he's the one taking on the debt. The rune just indicates that someone else will pay for their passage.
...And he's postponing. And I still know he's doomed.
Got it in one. Exactly what I meant.