Three Ways to Fix Eragon

[ultramega10]

 Hey guys, it's been awhile, hasn't it?

 

Sorry, I haven't been working, I've been really, really busy.

 

So, I had a recent idea. Since we're busily sporking the Eragon story, I have an idea for a thought experiment. How about all of us come up with three core things we think should be used to improve the book, Eragon?

 

Remember, we want to keep it constructive. It's easy and fun to point out a problem. It's much harder to find a solution. The latter is what we're aiming for here.

 

So, here are my thoughts:

1:

Go through the text with a machete. Cut down the meaningless text. All of the problems in Eragon would be less serious if Paolini weren't trying to sound like Tolkien. Pacing would improve this story massively.

 

2:

Flesh out the Empire, provide more worldbuilding, and make an attempt to create a history. If Paolini came up with histories for people like King Palancar, it would help with immersion. It would also make it easier to write the characters in a credible fashion. If you know the history of your world, it will be easier to write about how the characters react to that history.

 

3:

Make Eragon into a character. Bring him down to earth and really think about how he should act and think, given who he is. Make his coming of age have the meaning as he changes and shifts to the events of the plot. If Eragon is made into an actual character in his own right, it will make every scene in the story better. By inhabiting a better character, the world we see his viewed through a better lens.

Do these three general changes and the narrative will be better paced, the world would feel realer, and our protagonist would be less insufferable.
 

Anyway, those are my thoughts. What do you think?