What a silly and ill-fitting chapter title. It sounds like the name of a Pixar short.
We are told that the mood is grim and even Veremund is “sunk in uncharacteristic gloom”
So they started to call him Veremund the Grim!!
In the centre of it, a “gigantic head” has formed out of the clouds. Oooh, scary!
"Simba, you have forgotten me!"
Vaguely manlike, although its bulging forehead and massive beaked nose looked almost like those of a bird of prey,
After this he just has a "beak". Also birds of prey are not known for having a "bulging forehead". Also Gorge's entire physical setup is genetically impossible.
If you want to establish him as evil, Douglass, use his actions, not his appearance.
You're SOL there, then. The only really evil shit in this trilogy is done by the handsome Axis and the BEAUUUTIFUL Azhure.
Veremund shouts out his name, stands in “the stirrups of his saddle” and slaps Axis in the face as hard as he can.
It was about time someone bitchslapped that asshole.
“I came to your mother like this. I came to your mother like this and she loved me as I am! Yes! She loved me! She writhed for me!”
This whole "Gorge posing as Axis' father" thing will soon be dropped forever anyway. It's entirely pointless, in other words. It's not even a mystery because we've got those two chucklefucks here to immediately tell us what's really going on.
“his voice becoming stronger with each phrase”. (Phrase?)
For someone whose books focused so obsessively on music, Douglass really didn't seem to know much about it.
Also, Gorgrael is not responsible for the love of his parents!!
Yeah, this bit is just incredibly childish, cruel and below the belt and an actually heroic character would never stoop this low.
Axis finally lets Belaguez go (poor horse…) and whispers to himself that Gorgrael is not his father.
Of course not. As the hero you must have the good-looking evil deadbeat dad.
“into a more dreadful display of power”
Douglass is very fond of words like "dreadful" and "frightful", which just comes across as very... I don't know, like something a prim old lady would say. So rather than condemning the horror of what the villain is doing she just sounds snippily disapproving.
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Date: 2024-04-09 11:13 am (UTC)What a silly and ill-fitting chapter title. It sounds like the name of a Pixar short.
So they started to call him Veremund the Grim!!
"Simba, you have forgotten me!"
After this he just has a "beak". Also birds of prey are not known for having a "bulging forehead". Also Gorge's entire physical setup is genetically impossible.
You're SOL there, then. The only really evil shit in this trilogy is done by the handsome Axis and the BEAUUUTIFUL Azhure.
It was about time someone bitchslapped that asshole.
This whole "Gorge posing as Axis' father" thing will soon be dropped forever anyway. It's entirely pointless, in other words. It's not even a mystery because we've got those two chucklefucks here to immediately tell us what's really going on.
For someone whose books focused so obsessively on music, Douglass really didn't seem to know much about it.
Yeah, this bit is just incredibly childish, cruel and below the belt and an actually heroic character would never stoop this low.
Of course not. As the hero you must have the good-looking evil deadbeat dad.
Douglass is very fond of words like "dreadful" and "frightful", which just comes across as very... I don't know, like something a prim old lady would say. So rather than condemning the horror of what the villain is doing she just sounds snippily disapproving.