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antishurtugal_rebornHello, everyone. This chapter is quite short.
The chapter starts with Murtagh lying awake at night. He uses his mind powers to check if everyone is asleep, and then creeps to a chest, using the word for quiet, Maela, in the ancient language to make sure the lid doesn’t creak. He then gets his sword and other things out of the chest. He leaves behind the guard uniform because he doesn’t feel comfortable wearing it, although he admits to himself that it could help him avoid attention. We don’t get any clue why he doesn’t want to wear the uniform, let alone why that reason is strong enough to make Murtagh do something to make the mission harder.
He then sneaks out of the barracks. There’s a tense moment where he trips over a cot in the dark and a guard stirs, but he makes it to the archway leading to the tunnels without incident.
He does not use an invisibility spell. Maybe he doesn’t know one. But he also doesn’t use Maela to muffle whatever noises he could make, which is something we know he can do.
Murtagh goes down some stairs and gets to the tunnels, which he thinks are made by humans instead of elves, which is what a minor character had said earlier. He sees a secure door that’s guarded and realizes that’s where he has to go. He needs to get past the guard, though, and the guard is warded against magical attacks. He uses the Name to get past the guard’s defenses, and then puts him to sleep. He catches the guard, but the pike the guard was holding falls on the ground.
Murtagh does not use the quiet spell at this moment either.
He pauses to see if the noise got attention, though no one comes. He watches a spider as he waits at one point, looking at it in disgust. Why he even notices a spider on the wall is a mystery to me. Anyway, no one from the barracks is coming. Given that Murtagh descended an entire set of stairs to get to the tunnels, I wouldn’t be too worried. I do wonder why there aren’t any more guards in these tunnels, though. If I was keeping werecat kittens in a creepy basement, I would definitely make sure the entrance was well-guarded.
Murtagh goes to the door, and it doesn’t open, because it is locked. Murtagh’s about to use magic, but decides to search the guard for keys instead, and, sure enough, the guard has one. I find it funny that he’s an untrained magician, but jumps to magic for mundane things. He opens the door and goes in. The chapter ends.
I don’t really have anything else to say about this chapter. It should have been incorporated into the next one. I don’t really know why this had to be separated out. Also, if I were Murtagh, I would be using the quiet spell everywhere. I can excuse him not using the invisibility spell, since he may not actually know it, but after the first tripping incident, come on.
The chapter also managed to be repetitive, even with this small number of pages. Twice, Murtagh accidentally makes a noise, and waits to see if guards come/anyone is awake. Twice, nothing happens. Makes him seem kinda clumsy, honestly. Also, that’s a moment that kind of needs to be used sparingly. Once was plenty.
Also, there's an elipsis in the chapter title for some reason. It isn't necessary.
Anyway, next up is The Door of Stone with Snarkbotanya
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Date: 2025-04-10 02:02 pm (UTC)He does. He just isn't using it because he's a fucking idiot.
He DOES? Damn, that makes everything even more stupid.
This is just weird, horrible and pathetic. Paotagonists really seem to hate animals.
Here's the exact passage: There he waited, breathless, straining his ears to hear if anyone in the barracks was coming to investigate. Long moments passed. A breath of wind tickled the back of his neck, and he watched a large brown spider crawl along the corner of the wall, a sac of white eggs webbed to its back. His lip curled.
Like dude, WHY ARE YOU LOOKING AT A SPIDER RIGHT NOW?!
He used an invisibility spell right after decapitating Mr Fishy and why is he so clumsy now? He trips over all the goddamn time!
Oh. To be honest, I completely forgot that chapter. But yeah, I was wondering why he trips all the time. Like, I said, having Murtagh make a loud noise twice in a few pages doesn't make him look competent.
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Date: 2025-04-10 02:16 pm (UTC)Was my coverage so forgettable, then? /teasing
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Date: 2025-04-10 02:30 pm (UTC)Sorry....
Unfortunately though, I have been very busy, which is why I've taken so ungodly long posting this. It's scrambled things a bit. Heck, I've forgotten whether something the day before, or two days before, and I remember that yesterday I was trying to figure out whether a small interaction I remember happened in real life, or if I dreamed it.
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Date: 2025-04-10 02:58 pm (UTC)Oh, I don't mind (and I do think my spork was forgettable, which is why I said it in the first place). And yes, I recognise that from my own experience, too, though it's not so severe; in my case, I think it's linked to having had somme mental health troubles instead of being busy.
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Date: 2025-04-11 11:02 pm (UTC)...in my case, I think it's linked to having had somme mental health troubles instead of being busy.
Boy is that familiar. I get it.
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Date: 2025-04-11 12:16 am (UTC)On top of that, in Eldest he was fluent enough in the AL to have an entire conversation in it with Eragon, yet know he barely knows any words. Like WTF is this bullshit?
He also has Eragon's ADHD now, apparently. And this bit just comes off as mean-spirited.
Like dude, there are ways to put your character in danger and raising the tension without turning them into a useless incompetent.
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Date: 2025-04-11 11:03 pm (UTC)On top of that, in Eldest he was fluent enough in the AL to have an entire conversation in it with Eragon, yet know he barely knows any words. Like WTF is this bullshit?
He knew enough to goddamn smite someone.
Like dude, there are ways to put your character in danger and raising the tension without turning them into a useless incompetent.
Exactly!
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Date: 2025-04-12 12:37 am (UTC)And Paolini does not know how to write about a character that powerful in a convincing way, so he either gives them lots and lots of baddies to fight (instead of making their enemies just as powerful or more powerful) or just makes them so incompetent they just randomly don't take advantage of being powerful. Eragon killing all those soldiers was stupid and nonsensical as well as sociopathic because he's far too powerful to be "forced" to stoop to that. He could just be putting them all to sleep or scaring them off. Instead he just hacks them up with his sword while feeling "grim satisfaction".
While Eragon is also stupid, incompetent and randomly clumsy, it's NEVER to this degree. When Eragon is in "peril" it's always because there are lots of enemies and sometimes an enemy Rider and dragon to fight. Here, the stupidity, incompetence and clumsiness feels intentional.